The government's investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is in the debate phase on how funds raised from various means into the society's pocket should be managed by the government. Meanwhile, some people are saying that public funds should be invested in public services rather than
arts
,
music
and
theatre
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will give consequential reasons why
such
should not be done. There are crucial things that should never be forgotten or neglected in any country and
that is
'History'. History has to do with identity.
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, there's a local community in the eastern part of the world that
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known for a ceremony like the 'yam festival' during
this
ceremony lots of
arts
are displayed and each crafted art has its symbol of representation.
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is why there's a place called the museum, where different crafted artwork is displayed and individuals from different diversities visit with their friends and family to have fun and as well learn new things.
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achieved for enhancing other infrastructures.
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,
arts
,
music
and
theatre
are part of every school curriculum. Lots of people derive joy
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their leisure or free time to relax and bond their friendships
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Music
is something that has a way of easing out stress both emotional
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and mentally. Art ,
music
and
theatre
centre is an avenue for physical fitness and
this
improves health conditions like obesity.
Also
, art is a symbol of tradition and culture, without proper funding most of our local and classical
music
will be lost and
this
could lead to job loss and poor
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. In conclusion, as much as public services
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society, there are lots of merits why
arts
,
music
and
theatre
should not be neglected.
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society more investment should be channelled towards the sector.
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