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In many parts of the world, girls and boys are educated together in co- education or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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There are a lot of mixed schools across the world, But some people believe that it would be profitable if they study in a
single–sex
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school
. I completely disagree
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 theory and I try to explain my own ideas. In essay will be written
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 my own ideas. Educating together in a mixed
school
 can provide much more learning. If boys and girls study in one
school
, they would learn and develop their ideas. They
are differ
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 from each other and they have unique characteristics.
For example
, Male
students
 are very rude in some
situation
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, but female
students
 are not they always try to be polite. I think they would learn to be polite
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 if they
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 together.
On the other hand
,
blended
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 institute has
adverse
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 impact on the educational system.
Firstly
, there is
misconception
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a misconception
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 in public
school
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schools
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, female
students
 are not allowed to play in sporting events.
Such
 as games basketball,
football
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 is only suitable for boys. The reality
that
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 girls are dominated by boys. To sum
up
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 in my conclusion,
students
 must study blended
school
 because
this
 type of
schools
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are
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 more beneficial than single-sex
school
.
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