Art is considered as en essential part of all culture throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology, and business. What do you think that is? What could be done to encourage people to take an interest in the arts?

So far,
people
believe that
art
plays a vital role
of
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all
culture
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cultures
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throughout the world. While some
people
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separate
seperate
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separate
their attention from
art
to science,
technology
and business these days, I believe that
people
still appreciate
art
via different media. We can appreciate
art
through the internet or digital web. Science or
technology
have
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never distracted
people
's focus.
Art
just turns into various
style
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and
inflitrates
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infiltrates
infiltrated
into our daily life. In my opinion,
art
is everywhere without
noticement
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notice men
in
people
's life. When we read the paper about cars or
airplane
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on
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technology
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magazine, the article mentions not only the product
specificaiton
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specification
specifications
but
also
the product design. Industrial design is part of
art
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the art
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as well.
Furthermore
, when we watch some business
colums
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columns
, the content must
includes
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include
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marketing strategy, advertisement, and
also
commercial design.
Art
can be anything and the only thing we have to do is to discover it. In order to encourage
people
to take an interest in the arts, we can cultivate their sense of beauty in school.
Human
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have abilities to see
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the colorful
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colorful
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colourful
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world,
to
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apply
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memorize impressive
scene
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scenes
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by
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through
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painting or photography, and
to
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apply
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share
to
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each other as a cultural treasure. We
born
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to enjoy
this
world, and if we
oberserve
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observe
this
lovely circumstance
in
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caution, we can notice that no matter
natural
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whether natural
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thing
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things
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or artificial stuff are beautiful. Try to appreciate everything around yourself, you can find
art
. To sum up, I insist that
art
is an essential part of all
culture
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cultures
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because
people
get along with
art
all the time if they enjoyed their life.
In these
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days, we can appreciate
art
in science,
technology
, and business area either.
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