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Describe a producing process of leather goods in the factory

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The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of leather goods. Overall we can see that It includes 11 steps, beginning with the animal
skin
 - the raw material and ending with finished commodities.
Initially
, animal
skin
 is dried by the wind and sunlight. After that, it is delivered to the factory by trucks. In
this
 factory, after being washed
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the water with the lime in order to clean it, the
skin
 material is soaked
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 the lime for its smell. Following that, a specialized machine plays the role
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 flattening from the
skin
 material to the
tannin
. The seventh step is that
tannin
 is soaked
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 a mix of water and vegetable matter.
Next
, Before being delivered to a production factory,
tannin
 was polished by a piece of heavy equipment. The final step is that
tannin
 is used in factories
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to make fashion commodities
such
 as shoes, bags or some sporty items including footballs or tennis balls.
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