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Some people think that employers should not be concerned about how employees dress at work, but the quality of work only. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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How people dress at
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 has long been a source of controversy. Some people believe that
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 is a personal choice that has nothing to do with employees. They claim the quality of
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 is far more important. I partially agree with
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 notion.
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 with, I totally agree that workers' knowledge, experience and skills are decisive to a company's accomplishments.
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, market leaders like Google, Microsoft and Apple would have never prospered that much if they had chosen their staff
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 based on what they wear,
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 of their strong resumes.
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,
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 quality ought to be always the
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 priority of business leaders in employment decisions.
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,
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 does not mean that employees can have a hundred per cent freedom in what they wear.
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, as long as staff
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 may come from different social levels, enforcing uniforms can establish a sense of uniformity among
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.
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, if a rich team member wears luxury designer clothing, He may not only impose a feeling of superiority on other
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 but
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 may eradicate the other's self-esteem.
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, wearing cosy clothes like pyjamas at
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 can trigger an ambience of informality, which results in not doing the job seriously and efficiently.
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, it can be a good idea to impose some restrictions on what employees wear at
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. To conclude, I believe that the importance of team
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' capabilities had better not be overshadowed by inferior factors like dressing.
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, establishing some policies regarding professional dressing might be a wise choice.
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