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Some people think that getting a degree from univerity is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A lot of people think that getting the best way to secure a good job whereas others believe that
work
experience
 is more valued than a
degree
 by employers.
This
 essay will discuss both views but in my opinion, I strongly believe that
work
experience
 is more valued than a
degree
.
To begin
 with, many people believe that getting a
degree
 from a university is the best way to secure a job.
However
, in today's competitive world having a
degree
 alone won't be enough to land a job because real-world
skills
 are equally important which come with
experience
.
For instance
, a lot of university graduates are unemployed.
Secondly
, having
work
experience
 does offer the employer an assurity of what
skills
 one can offer to them that the
degree
 cannot offer which is why I think
work
experience
 and
skills
 are more valued. For example, mega companies like Tesla, Microsoft, Apple etc have openly said that having a
degree
 is not important to them as long as one has
skills
. To sum up, due to the reason explained above a
degree
 doesn't anymore get one secure
jobs
Change to a singular noun
job
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 whereas
skills
 and
experience
 which is more valued by employers nowadays.
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