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In many countries, tourism is a major part of the economy, but it also causes environmental damage and ruins the places it exploits. It is argued that tourists should pay an additional tax to compensate for this damage. Do you agree?

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There is no doubt that these days, globalization and tourism have transformed our globe. Some people
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 that high
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 should be empose to fix
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 environment.
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 others claim these
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 leads to travel limiting and culture minimizing.
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 paper will investigate both views, eventually; I will draw my own conclusion. On the one hand, high tourism
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 leads to plethora
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, Earned money helps some countries in their economical expenditures like education and medical services.
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, nations could spend
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 funds to fix and recover
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 environmental damage due to pollution. As a shining example, Dubai depends on tourists to improve their different aspects and now it is
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 of the most advanced cities around the world. On the other flip of the coin. Travelling around the world leads to
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cultures and knowledge
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 it plays a huge role in commercial benefits.
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 expense
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 to financial and cultural issues.
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, visiting expensive countries would be not affordable for low-income
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 contributes
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 declining tourism rates.
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, Singapore tens to be
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 of the most beautiful and unique
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 but with its' value-added
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 only
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travelers
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 could visit
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 amazing city. In conclusion,
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 some individuals believed withholding
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 have a wide variety of benefits including resolving environmental impairment,
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others claim these
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 might Limit some
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 ability to discover and advent.
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, I strongly believe that travelling and exploring new places should be affordable for all adventurers
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 different economical classes.
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