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Every year several language die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

#year #language #people #life #languages
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Each year a few
languages
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 vanish and some individuals believe that it is fantastic to decrease the number of
languages
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 all around the world and
for achieving
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 ease of life. I completely disagree with their statements.
this
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 essay will discuss how speaking in other
languages
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instead
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 of
mother
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one mother
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 tongue and
fewer
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having fewer
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 interactions with tourists for visiting other societies
maybe
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may
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 deteriorate
to
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apply
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contract
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contact
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 with others.
Firstly
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, the world contains a lot of
countries
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 that have their own cultures so
peoples
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people
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 of each country are custom to their culture and language because as they
were
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 born
were
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they are
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 in touch with their mother tounges so they can express their
feeling
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feelings
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 in
this
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 way but when they forced to speak to other
languages
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 they may not show their emotions simply because their unconscious feeling is based on first years of their life.
For instance
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, a study in India shows that after choosing English as a common language
of
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them
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apply
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about 70% of families prefer to speak in Persian
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 having a mutual understanding.
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, if the laws do not permit them to speak in the way they want the communication between populations will fall.
On the other hand
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, the tourist industry has an important role in communication and most tourists choose their destinations in a way that they want to see the different cultures, civilisations and
languages
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.
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, some rare
languages
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 are popular for them and without these, their
countries
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 are not attractive to visitors.
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, speaking in Japanese is the reason for visiting Japan for tourists and if their language dies out one of the most important reasons for
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 issue will be destroyed. In conclusion,
dieing
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dying
 out the
languages
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 in some
countries
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 have their negative effects on communication and if they vanish, people can not contact each other because of losing their mother tongue and
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 those
countries
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 are not interesting to visit for some visitors.
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Ensure correct punctuation and capitalisation in the text. This includes using capital letters after full stops and for the first-person pronoun 'I'.
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Strengthen the clarity and delivery of your argument or point of view. The essay addresses the question, but the position lacks clarity in several places.
Grammatical Accuracy
Manipulate a wider range of sentence structures and correct minor grammatical errors, like subject-verb agreement ('languages dies' should be 'languages die').
Formality and register
Avoid colloquial terms like 'u' and use more formal language ('you').
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