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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills
Education
 is thought to be a legacy and
people
 strife hard to acquire
education
,
this
make
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 many
people
to
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apply
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opined that
higher
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a higher
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level
 of
education
 will bring a better job opportunity, but
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of
people
 thought
experience
 and acquiring skills
is
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are
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 more efficient.
This
 essay will
highlights
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 some
point
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points
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for
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of
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 both views and give
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an opinion
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opinion
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opinions
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.
To begin
, many
people
 who thought acquiring
education
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an education
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 can grant a better opportunity thinks in term of
company
 employment which require
some
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a
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 certain
level
 of
education
 before the job can be granted.
For
instance
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 according to a
company
who
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that
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 posted an advertisement,
the
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apply
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part of their requirements is an
advance
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level
 of
education
 like(MSC) and
people
 who do not have the required
level
 are not
qualify
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qualified
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 to apply.
Moreover
, many
company
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companies
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 hire an
advance
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advanced
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level
 of
education
 because they thought
this
 will hard value to their
organization
 and boost their visibility.
Also
, many
organization
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organizations
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 require
this
 so that the employee will be efficient and capable of handling and
manage
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managing
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 the
company
 very well through the knowledge being acquired from the school. Meanwhile, some basic
organization
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organizations
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 want to employ them so they can represent the
company
 globally.
On the other hand
, some
organization
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organizations
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 are in quest for
experience
, they thought the
level
 of
experience
 will make the employee perform effectively, and will be able to solve a task without bringing any issue to the
organization
.
Additionally
, some
organization
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organizations
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 like the
company
 that deals with electricity need some
level
 of
experience
 in the field to avoid
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committing
commenting
commiting
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committing
 error.
Moreover
,
people
 who thought that
experience
 matter most
speaks
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 in term of some profession that needs some
level
 of
experience
 before being employed. In an advertisement of one
company
 that
major
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majors
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 in
production
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the production
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 of
manual
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manuals
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 for agriculture they require some
level
 of requirements which my niece who
employed
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was employed
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then
was not qualify
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did not qualify
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 because he did not meet up the requirement. In conclusion, both
level
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levels
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 of
education
 and
experience
 matter most and both
compliment
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complement
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 each other. In
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 field skills and
education
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,education
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education
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apply
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are required to be able to carry out the job efficiently. In my opinion, I think
level
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the level
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 of
education
 matter most because
,
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apply
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 in an
advance
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advanced
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 country the qualifications will
speaks
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speak
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 in the curriculum vitae rather than
experience
 and most need an
advance
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advanced
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level
 of
education
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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