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Band 3

Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples.

Nowadays,
a
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massive
trouble
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 is
climate
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change
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in
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particular
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 it became more distinct in
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last
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the last
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 20
years
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.
One
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 social
group
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 complains about
greenhouse
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gases
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 and
exhaust
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fumes
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, which deplete the
ozone
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layer
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,
erupted
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and erupted
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 in the
atmosphere
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, while
others
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 profoundly disagree and
opine
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 that
such
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 green
politics
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 as fully ceasing
utilizing
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utilisation
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 of various fossil
fuels
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 will lead to
an
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apply
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irreparable
damage
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on
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to
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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. Nowadays,
a
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apply
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massive
trouble
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 is
climate
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change
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,
in
Linking Words
particular
Add a comma
,particular
show examples
 it became more distinct in
Linking Words
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
 20
years
Use synonyms
.
One
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 social
group
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 complains about
greenhouse
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gases
Use synonyms
 and
exhaust
Use synonyms
fumes
Use synonyms
, which deplete the
ozone
Use synonyms
layer
Use synonyms
,
erupted
Correct word choice
and erupted
show examples
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
, while
others
Use synonyms
 profoundly disagree and
opine
Use synonyms
 that
such
Linking Words
 green
politics
Use synonyms
 as fully ceasing
utilizing
Replace the word
utilisation
show examples
 of various fossil
fuels
Use synonyms
 will lead to
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
irreparable
damage
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
to
show examples
Correct article usage
the economic
show examples
economic
Replace the word
economy
show examples
. Nowadays,
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
massive
trouble
Use synonyms
 is
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
,
in
Linking Words
particular
Add a comma
,particular
show examples
 it became more distinct in
Linking Words
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
 20
years
Use synonyms
.
One
Use synonyms
 social
group
Use synonyms
 complains about
greenhouse
Use synonyms
gases
Use synonyms
 and
exhaust
Use synonyms
fumes
Use synonyms
, which deplete the
ozone
Use synonyms
layer
Use synonyms
,
erupted
Correct word choice
and erupted
show examples
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
, while
others
Use synonyms
 profoundly disagree and
opine
Use synonyms
 that
such
Linking Words
 green
politics
Use synonyms
 as fully ceasing
utilizing
Replace the word
utilisation
show examples
 of various fossil
fuels
Use synonyms
 will lead to
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
irreparable
damage
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
to
show examples
Correct article usage
the economic
show examples
economic
Replace the word
economy
show examples
. Nowadays,
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
massive
trouble
Use synonyms
 is
climate
Use synonyms
change
Use synonyms
,
in
Linking Words
particular
Add a comma
,particular
show examples
 it became more distinct in
Linking Words
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
 20
years
Use synonyms
.
One
Use synonyms
 social
group
Use synonyms
 complains about
greenhouse
Use synonyms
gases
Use synonyms
 and
exhaust
Use synonyms
fumes
Use synonyms
, which deplete the
ozone
Use synonyms
layer
Use synonyms
,
erupted
Correct word choice
and erupted
show examples
 in the
atmosphere
Use synonyms
, while
others
Use synonyms
 profoundly disagree and
opine
Use synonyms
 that
such
Linking Words
 green
politics
Use synonyms
 as fully ceasing
utilizing
Replace the word
utilisation
show examples
 of various fossil
fuels
Use synonyms
 will lead to
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
irreparable
damage
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
to
show examples
Correct article usage
the economic
show examples
economic
Replace the word
economy
show examples
.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy sources
  • economic collapse
  • fossil fuels
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • alternative resources
  • clean energy
  • technological advancements
  • government subsidies
  • energy transition
  • reliability
  • job creation
  • economic benefits
  • global warming
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • innovation
  • infrastructure
  • regulatory framework
  • energy efficiency
  • climate resilience
  • decarbonization
  • socioeconomic impact
  • energy security
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