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Many people opine that all university students should study whatever they like, whereas some people think the university should teaching some subjects that only related to science and technology for students.

#people #opine #university #students #study #subjects #science #technology
In recent years, people have different views of whether should university
students
 learn curriculum according to preference or depending on how useful the subjects are. As for me, I believe that
students
 have
right
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 to decide what kind of classes they are going to take. It can be argued that learning useful courses is really helpful when
students
 apply for a job in the future .
For example
, As the IT industry goes popular , studying curriculums related to technology will improve their computer skills and how to design beautiful powerpoints Which play
an
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 significant role in work. So It would be easier for graduates to get a job offer.
However
. I support that
students
 are able to attend classes based on their
like
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. Since people's energy is limited, if they have a clear idea of what they desire to study ,
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they
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the y
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they
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 will pay more
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attention
attion
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attention
 to it and work more efficient than others.
For instance
, individuals who are interested in
chemical
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,
they
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usually spend many hours doing experiments in
lab
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, until making meaningful strides in the area of studies they chose.
Instead
 learning Compulsory courses might make them feel bored and
without
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passionate
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.
Therefore
 , They are more likely to have a good performance when
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engaging
engaged
engagig
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engaged
 in favourite subjects. In conclusion,
although
 useful curriculums may put a good effect on people's future, I believe that they are ought to study classes they love.
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