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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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According to
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 some,
tourism
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 has a great influence on uplifting the economy,
while
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 some argue that because of accessive
tourism
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, local
people
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 and the environment
has
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 negatively affected.
This
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 essay will discuss some of the benefits and even drawbacks of foreign
people
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 visiting different places and
also
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suggests
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 my opinion. On the one hand,
tourism
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 has benefited society in tremendous ways. As it creates opportunities for the local
people
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 to sell old and antique items by displaying them to visitors, by these ways many families have generated income to move above the poverty line. In the end,
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 has increased the economy indirectly.
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, a massive amount of nations are still totally dependent on excessive
tourism
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.
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, India has significantly increased the economy by 52 % just because of welcoming foreign
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.
On the other hand
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, it has some disadvantages to
people
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as well as
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 to the environment.
Firstly
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, a lot of tourist places are overcrowded and
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 generates thrash all around the way. Local inhabitants sometimes experience a sense of discrimination because of skin colour and traditional ways
to live
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life.
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, because of plenty of
people
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 visiting, there is an increase in demand for using personal taxis and cabs, which emits dangerous gases and eventually cause pollution throughout the nation.
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, In
India
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India,
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 adults are suffering from
cough
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 and dangerous diseases because of pollution.
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, by looking closely, I firmly believe that there is a more negative side to excessive
tourism
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 and very few benefits.

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Improve the logical structure of your essay to enhance coherence and cohesion. Make sure to include a clear introduction and conclusion to effectively address the task. Utilize specific examples and develop your ideas more comprehensively to address the prompt thoroughly.
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The response is somewhat incomplete. You have presented some ideas, but they are not developed fully. Expand on your points and provide a more comprehensive response to the task. Additionally, include more specific examples to support your arguments and fully address the advantages and disadvantages of tourism.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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