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In many countries pleastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies.Do you think the advantage outweighs the disadvantage

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In most Nations,
food
 and drink
industries
 now utilize
containers
 made from
plastic
 as they are readily available.
Although
this
 will give room for recycling thereby helping
industries
 minimize cost,it can
poses
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 a threat to the health of customers.
Plastic
materials
such
 as
containers
 can be recycled and used again.Most
food
 and drink
industries
 would prefer to
use
plastic
containers
 or bottles because it can help to provide easy access to
materials
 through recycling thereby helping them to minimize
cost
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 of production.They would rather encourage the masses to recycle them
,
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than dump them as waste disposal. An industry
who
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 uses recycled
plastic
materials
 will not need to pass through the process of purchasing the raw
materials
 for manufacturing these products.
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Furthermore
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, Most
industries
use
 these
containers
 for safety reasons. Every
citizens
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 of these Nations will have easy access to the product as there will be
low
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 risk of hazards
such
 as injuries from broken bottles meaning that Children,
adolescence
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, adults and even the aged can
use
 it easily without the fear of harming themselves. For
instance
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 Coca-cola bottling
company
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companies
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 will emphasise the need to recycle their
plastic
 bottles because of the gains they derive from it and because of the safety it brings.
However
,
plastic
materials
 may be poisonous if not properly produced. As
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it
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 production involves the
use
 of chemicals which could end up being detrimental to the health of individuals if used excessively.
This
 may lead to various forms of diseases
such
 as cancer.
For example
,a consumer who buys
food
 from a
food
 vendor who has used a bad
plastic
 container unknowingly eats
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toxic
substance
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substances
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 and falls sick after a period of time,not knowing the cause. In conclusion,I opine that the
use
 of
plastic
containers
have
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more merits compared to
it's
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its
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 demerit.Because,even though it
minimize
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minimizes
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 cost and can be safe to
use
 ,it's can result in health hazards.
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