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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In modern societies, there are more and more countries aware of climate change due to the frequency of natural disasters,
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 as droughts, floods and mudslides. People who live on earth
is
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 consuming
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energy
enenergy
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energy
 as always,
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, how to find replaceable and safer
energy
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 is super crucial for each
nations
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. In my opinion, developing new power resources to replace existing
energy
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 should be considered
as
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in
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 the
first
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 place. Owning to the destruction
from
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of
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environment
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the environment
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 happened more frequently,
many
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and many
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of
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citizens suffered from the risk of surviving.
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, it not only crushed
nation's
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the nation's
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 economy but
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 had
impact
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an impact
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 on the operation of
business
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the business
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. The threats from our nature gave many warnings to
human
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a human
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being
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beings
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, reflecting the conditions of over-consumed
energy
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. As a consequence, every country should take the responsibility of protecting our earth. One of the influential methods is carbon reduction, there
are
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 much research
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that indicates
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indicates
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indicating
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 that carbon
emissons
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emissions
 are the main reason
of
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for
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 rising temperature. The influence
from
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of
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 high temperature will lead to severe climate revenge,
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, glaciers in the north arctic
is
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 decreasing with rapid speed, resulting in
the
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less board for polar bears to take rest.
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, it's not a piece of news about food shortages, many regions around the world facing
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 urgent problem, and it became more popular among us. In conclusion, I totally agree with the exploration of new
energy
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 if we don't take
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 issue seriously, it may lead to an unavoidable situation for people all over the world. At that time, we can't change anything but bear the result of natural
disaster
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disasters
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.

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