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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, some
people
 tend to show off their materialistic purchases.
However
, these
people
 are respected more by
the
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society
 than those who have a good heart. I completely agree that
people
 no longer value trust and kindness,
instead
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 they appreciate those who own expensive things. Those who have a high societal status are appreciated more.
For example
, a municipality engineer will help
people
 design their roads and houses, being a servant of the
society
. Even if the engineer has a bad attitude or does not complete the town's important tasks on time,
people
 will still follow him because
eventually
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 he is the one who gets their work done.
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 a politician; no matter how corrupt he is, he will be highly respected because of his rank in
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society
.
Thus
,
people
 value a person who is among the high ranks in spite of their bad personality.
People
 these days respect those who own a fancy possession
instead
 of a simple one. For an instance, most
of
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the
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people
 have
a
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huge respect for those who drive a car but belittle those who own a motorbike or no vehicle at all. If I
have
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own
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 a
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four-wheeler
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four wheeler
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,
people
 will befriend me but they won't even want to get to know me if I don't own one. So,
people
 judge others according to their materialistic possessions. In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that
people
 no longer care about
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moral characteristics like honesty and trust but value those who have a good status in
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society
 and those who own expensive products.
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