Due to the development and the expansion of supermarkets many small, local markets are unable to compete. some people think that the clossing off local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In our modern society supermarkets have multiplied
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all corners of the world and become a necessity for grocery shopping. The variety of
products
available coupled with unbeatable prices only helped their popularity rise. But
this
success came at the expense of local businesses that can no longer compete with these shopping giants. On one
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some might find giant shopping
centers
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more affordable and time efficient.
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these giant
markets
made groceries less time-consuming. As all daily used
products
such
as food, toiletries or cleaning
products
are available in one place, grocery shopping became a quicker and less energy-draining chore to do. In contrary to local
markets
where a person has to go from shop to shop in order to get everything done.
Second
supermarkets offer unbeatable fees on a wide variety of
products
thanks to fair competition and the availability of merchandise from all around the world. And
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we can find a wide range of exotic and uncommon
products
in just one place.
This
is even more interesting for people living in foreign countries who desire a little taste of home.
On the other
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local
markets
represent a sustainable and eco-friendly way of shopping.
First
local shops are majority owned by folks living in the same community and it is a duty as a member of
this
community to encourage and buy from these small businesses.
Second
these
markets
while having higher prices, usually offer better quality
products
organically made and with fewer chemicals and GMOs.
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it is more environmentally friendly to shop at local
markets
as the merchandise sold is for the majority of the time locally sourced and not imported by extremely polluting boats and planes from foreign countries. To summarize even though supermarket's popularity has been on the rise lately thanks to the diversity of
products
available at lower fees, local
markets
still represent a more sustainable and environment-friendly way of shopping. In my
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I do not think that supermarkets are on their way to making local shops a thing of the past since people are becoming more and more aware of the negative impact these grocery giants have on our already fragile environment and
also
on small businesses owners who can only make a living thanks to the solidarity of the people in their community.
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