IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2.5

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#abortion #increases #topic #people
With the changes of the times,
people
’s thought is liberal which causes accidental pregnancies as well as
abortion
, mostly
abortion
 increases soon and becomes a contestable topic. Some
people
 think that
abortion
 is not acceptable because it hurts your body ; If you do an
abortion
 many times , you won’t have a pregnancy in the future;
then
 some
people
 believe that it is not a big deal. In my opinion, I agree
abortion
 should be legal; reasons will be discussed in the following:
First
 of all,
Correct your spelling
nowadays
nowday
Correct your spelling
nowadays
 a higher occurrence of pregnancy in younger groups who lack contraception methods and mature thinking , they can’t have the ability to raise a child,
thus
 making an
abortion
 is helpful to assist younger
people
 to return to school to finish their education.
Secondly
, some
womenhave
Correct your spelling
women have
been
Wrong verb form
being
show examples
sexually harassed
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 brings on an accidental pregnancy ,so in order to avoid psychological issues, it should be
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
abortion
 to release their stress.
Thirdly
, the unborn baby may
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
serious
Add an article
the serious
a serious
show examples
 disease; If the baby is born ,he/she will make pressure on their parents because they can’t afford the high cost of medical expenses. Above all, I agree that abortions should be legal ,but it
should'nt
Correct your spelling
shouldn't
 encourage
people
 to have an
abortion
. It's important that females get safe and legal medical attention.
Submitted by gac7077 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: