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You are planning a tour with your family to a tourist destination. Write a letter to a hotel manager asking about the availability of accommodation for the days you will be here and also tell him what type of room you prefer.

#tour #tourist #destination #hotel #manager #availability #accommodation #type #room
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is
Dmootry
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Dmitry
 and I would like to know about which suites are available to reserve
next
 weekend. I am
traveling
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 with my wife and two little children. We are going to arrive on Friday evening and leave on Monday morning. Because the kids are too small to eat in the restaurant, we need a room with kitchen amenities.
Also
, I have noticed on the hotel website, that there are a few rooms with a stunning view
on
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 the sea, and I am specifically interested in booking one of them.
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, taking into account that the whole family will be very tired after several hours of driving on Friday, I would really appreciate
if
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 our room is not above the loud bar. It is very important
,
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 because the
last
 time we stayed at your hotel my wife could not fall asleep due to the noise. Please let me know, which options
do
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you have present. Should you not have any rooms that match all our criteria, please describe, what
in particular
 is missing. I would be grateful if you could reply to my e-mail until Tuesday. Sincerely yours,
Dmootry
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Dmitry
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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