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in the past,most people worked for small businesses,while more people now work for large businesses. what are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?

There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon major
number
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 of individuals are working for small
industries
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from
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last
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 few years ,while
in
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the present multitude of folks
are
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prefer to do
jobs
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 in large
industries
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.One school of thought opinion that it is worthless ,
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 others consider that a couple of problems
also
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 occur because of the same.
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this
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 has a plethora of merits yet numerous demerits are
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 there which will be elaborated
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 upcoming paragraphs.68 To commence with,
jobs
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 are
important
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 part of our life and all the individuals who are in any service need salaries to support their families and love once.
Greater
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number
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 of
population
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the population
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 are working in the small manufacturing
industries
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 and
get
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 the proper amount of payment in the return .These types of small businesses
does
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 not harm the
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environment
evironment
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environment
 and
also
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follows
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 the guides of the state.In the past , small
industries
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 do not have modern technology as compared
higher
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to higher
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industries
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.The small task
industries
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, help in the employment as seen they provide
jobs
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 to
the
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all kinds of
people
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 and give equal amount of pay respectively.
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,they do not have machines so they need
large
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a large
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 crowd to do the work and delivered
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to the market.As a consequence ,small
industries
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 are beneficial to
give
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jobs
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 to the
people
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 and help the government to finish the problem of unemployment. On the
paradoxial
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paradoxical
 side,there are oodles drawbacks as well.The expenses of the public
has
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 elevated over
the
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time as all
people
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 need
higher
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a higher
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 amount of
the
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apply
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payment to support their
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families
family
familes
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families
 and
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particularly
particulary
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particularly
 for the higher studies of their children.
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 ,by working in the large
industries
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 folks got
great
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 deal as compared to small
industries
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 but
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number
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the number
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 of
jobs
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are
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is
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 limited as it
give
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gives
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 rise to the complication of unemployment as few communities benefit from
this
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 only.To cite an example,only
limited
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number
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 of
person's
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people
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 get
jobs
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 in
the
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apply
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large
industries
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 as
bunch
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a bunch
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 of work is done by
the
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apply
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machines .
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 , machines
harmful
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are harmful
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for
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to
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 the
people
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 of the society and
a
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apply
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big trouble for the workers who work in
factories
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 as they lost their
jobs
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 due to
this
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. In a nutshell,though
people
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 should prefer to do
jobs
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 in the small
factories
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 rather than in the big
factories
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 as they provide
emploment
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employment
 to them and help to survive in
this
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 difficult world.
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,big
factories
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is
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are
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beneficial
benficial
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beneficial
 for only some folks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • employee benefits
  • professional development
  • career advancement
  • financial stability
  • bureaucratic structure
  • creativity
  • job satisfaction
  • morale
  • work-life balance
  • intense competition
  • job pressure
  • skill acquisition
  • diverse range
  • corporate culture
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