Some people think the government should spend more money on public service rather than waste money on arts (i.e. music and painting). To extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common that more
people
are likely to think that the authority should spend more money on public services, instead
of wasting money on arts
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investors
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music
kinds of music
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films
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benefits
views
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know
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Korea
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country
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make
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makes
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are the
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In conclusion, the matter fund money on public facilities or art Replace the word
evolution
form
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forms
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role in Change the word
their
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the preservation
preservation
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preserving
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of cultural
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