Some people think the government should spend more money on public service rather than waste money on arts (i.e. music and painting). To extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common that more

people

are likely to think that the authority should spend more money on public services,

instead

of wasting money on

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.

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my perspective,

this

tendency

is totally disagree

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notion

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of the matter investing

on

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community

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.

First

of all, it is an indisputable fact that

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art

contribute

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a major advantage

in

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the economic

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economic

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economy

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.

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with many films, music videos,

liveshows

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live shows

and performance stages are released every year

that

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brought a large of income for

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the investor

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investor

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and

also

for the income of a nation.

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, the

USA

, the richest country and

also

famous

with

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for

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the

musics

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music

kinds of music

pieces of music

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and

films

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film

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industrial

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industries

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,

such

as Hollywood which bring

for

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the

USA

many

benefit

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in every

views

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.

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, the Avengers which movies have the highest profit in

over

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the world, as well as on the

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top

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100 grossing films in the world that 80-90% is the

USA

. In

additional

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, many albums and CDs music are sold out

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all

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planet that almost

from

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America, by selling albums, CDs and tickets show that make many famous

singer

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get wealth

such

as Taylor

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, Justin Bieber and Micheal Jackson.

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Moreover

Moverover

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, its convenience is clearly to be seen that the artistic field

contribute

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a huge role in the development of the

USA

.

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,

this

constantly causes some drawbacks

such

as keeping, saving and advertising national identities. Many movies about

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era of

a

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countries

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that make

people

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now

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know

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more about their forefather’s life in the past and as well as advertise with other countries about their

traditional

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and culture. Take a good example of it is

Korea

, in the previous time

Korea

was a developing

countries

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,

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when time

over of

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drama and music

industrial

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industry

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that

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make

Korea

progress more quickly and become one of the richest

country

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countries

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in the world. Remind

to

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South

Korea

that

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make

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people

remember

to

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Kpop, K-drama, BTS and Blackpink. Their phenomenon is a major waive for

Korea

, that

make

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people

know more about

Korea

and

also

advertise

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their foods, culture and lifestyle. After the

completed

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of

Artistic

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the Artistic

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field, the number of

people

learn

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Korean

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the Korean

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language

raise

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substantially. BTS and Blackpink, which

the

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faces of Samsung, by the developing of them led to the

evolved

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of Samsung cooperation. In conclusion, the matter fund money on public facilities or art

form

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has its pros and cons. In my opinion, I still think that there are more advantages if we know and realize how to control what we do in

artistic

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the artistic

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field.

Additionally

, we cannot deny the economic contribution of arts and

the

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role in

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the preservation

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preservation

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cultural

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of cultural

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identity.