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Write about the following topic: The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. The what extent so you agreed or disagree?

#topic #world #government #organizations #amount #damage #environment
I have many ambitions in my life. • But the one ambition that I am working on right now is to go for higher
education
 in Canada. • Earlier I didn’t have any plans to go abroad, but a conversation with a friend who went to Canada changed my opinion. • He told me about the difference in the quality of
education
 and the work opportunities available there. • So after completing my senior secondary
education
, I decided that it would be the best opportunity for me. • There are two main requisites to get admission
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 a good Canadian college. • The first is good grades in senior secondary
education
. • My grades are pretty satisfactory. So, I didn’t have to worry about that. • The second is a good score
in
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 English language tests like
IELTS
 or TOEFL. • I learned that Canadian colleges give preference to
IELTS
 and
hence
 I am taking the
IELTS
 exam. • For the past
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 months, I have been practicing for the exam. • I ordered the Cambridge books and started my preparation from them. • There is a lot of free material available on the internet. • So, I used that to prepare myself. • I used to practice for about 8 hours every day. • I used to try to cover every
IELTS
 module twice. • For listening and reading, I didn’t need much help.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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