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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Climate
change
 has now become a growing concern
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 and has made some think seriously about adopting efforts to tackle it effectively.
However
, others feel that people should acclimatize
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 it. I do favour the
first
 view, but a critical assessment is necessary before framing a rational conclusion. On the one hand, the reason why some claim that people should live with the
changes
 in
climate
 is because of the fact that these
changes
 cannot be reversed in a short span of time. To be clearer,
climate
change
 has occurred very gradually over time since the era of industrialization
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 and is now accelerating at an alarming pace. It is quite rational that no one can arrest these
changes
 in a day or two.
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this
 challenging situation in which it takes a longer span of time to slow down its pace, they feel that it is better to adapt
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 the
changes
 and live with
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.
On the other hand
, there exists an argument which strongly suggests serious efforts to alter the situation
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 a positive way.
This
 is because of the unprecedented consequences of
climate
change
. To be precise, many countries are seen
hapless
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 in managing the disasters caused by
this
.
For instance
, thousands of hectares of forests have become ashes in the USA and Australia due to wildfires.
Likewise
, torrential rains and flash floods have become common in arid areas. At
this
 point, immediate measures have to be taken by respective governments to mitigate the intensity of
climate
change
. After analysing both views in detail, it
clear
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 that man has to adjust
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 the existing situation
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the
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climate
change
 has created.
However
, I feel if practical measures are not adopted on an emergency basis, human life on the earth will be questioned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy
  • afforestation
  • sustainable practices
  • extreme weather events
  • carbon emissions
  • infrastructure
  • agricultural practices
  • moral responsibility
  • ecosystems
  • green jobs
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • poverty alleviation
  • quality of life
  • proactive measures
  • balanced approach
  • green technology
  • unavoidable impacts
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