Most Children want to watch the same TV programmes or play the same video games as their friends. Do you think parents should allow their children to do this ?

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programmes

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why I believe

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should not allow their

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. Namely, they may watch and play unsuitable

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, it is assumed they do not learn to make choices and always want to copy their friends

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, some people have different points of view that will be discussed in the following essay. Watching and playing the same as their mate have some drawbacks for

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those entertainment

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may not be good for their age and

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may

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contain

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contain

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addition, they may persuade

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likes and never make decisions for

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the same ages entertainment

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and if

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forbiden

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forbidden

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them they may watch and play those types of movies and

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without

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from their classmates

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they can not participate in their

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those kinds of hobbies. In conclusion, because of

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effects that may

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programmes

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parents

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should not allow their

children

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to choose them without thinking .

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Aug 16, 2022

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