Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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families are increasing in number. For

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reason, it is important to consider who can take care of

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. People have two different

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for

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matter.

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, some people think that

grandparents

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play

indispensable

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role in

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children

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upbringing, while others think that nursery schools

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the best choice. I hold the view that

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idea is better. On the one hand, it is argued that due to both

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parents

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work, so as not to remain uncontrolled,

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are taken care of by other family members,

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as

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is both thrifty and safer because

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rely on family members.

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,

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makes

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cozy

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.

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, it is irrefutable that being

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of

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by

grandparents

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enable

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children

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to learn their family tradition nearer.

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result

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being informed about their previous generation and

family

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activities will help them to keep

alive

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family culture.

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, I firmly believe that

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don't have adequate experience to look after

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, even some of them are physically feeble and inactive,

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parents

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have sufficient reasons to put their

children

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in childcare

centers

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. Actually, one of the main advantages of nursery

school

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is that they have trained staff who have enough practical ability to grow a child.

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, childcare

centers

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offer

entertaining

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which comes interesting to

children

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.

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,

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spending time with

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another child

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children

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gives an opportunity to improve their communication

skill

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. To conclude, both of them are up to the

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and family

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.

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how much

grandparents

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are safer for

children

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, childcare

centers

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have professional

team

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and

to be

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looked after by experts will be beneficial for them to adapt

society

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easily in the future.