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With an increasing percentage of the population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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It is an undeniable fact that technology has become an indispensable part of our daily lives. While
majority
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 of the
people
 communicate with the use of the
internet
 and private messages, in-person meetings declined gradually over the years. I completely agree with it and in the following
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a conclusion.
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technology made individuals
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communicate via
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 rather than
face
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face
.
In other words
,
people
 nowadays are relying on technology for interaction and hands
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 less
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person
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 meetings.
For instance
, apps like WhatsApp and Instagram allow video calling and audio facilities for free so
people
 use these facilities to interact with each other.
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 to
this
 citizens adapt
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 virtual environment of messaging that allows more information to share
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people
 which might not be possible to share on
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 basis while meeting. In regards to
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 sending messages or doing video calls is possible on daily basis
in contrast
 to meeting
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Furthermore
,
people
 in the contemporary epoch are lethargic and procrastinate
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 means adults are lazy and delay
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face
 communication and often choose
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 as a mode of talking and chatting. Another reason why preference has changed is because of inflation. With the increase in fuel ,prices individuals tend to commute less and prefer to do
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meeting
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in contrast
 to physical setup meetings. To conclude, I completely agree with the opinion of the
people
 that says that
internet
 and messaging services are playing
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 role in communication that indirectly
decline
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in
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person
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 interaction which was more observed in past.
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