some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world, subject like science and technology are more important than History.
Nowadays people believe that
student
should study Fix the agreement mistake
students
subjects
like science
and technology
while others believe that history
can be the most valuable subject in school in my opinion
I believe Add the comma(s)
, in my opinion,
subjects
like signs that technology
can be the most important subjects
than others.
On the one hand, history
can be one of the most important period
in school. because we can't proceed Change to a plural noun
periods
anything
without knowing Change preposition
with anything
past
of our country or world. Correct article usage
the past
For example
, our country
law system is established based on Change noun form
country's
the
past experiences. government or any other organizations cannot proceed Correct article usage
apply
their
Change preposition
with their
works
without knowing about countries past situation. Fix the agreement mistake
work
however
it is really important to know every details
about our country , Change to a singular noun
detail
otherwise
you have to Add a comma
,otherwise
to
face so many problemsRemove the redundancy
apply
,
when you are doing something official. when you Remove the comma
apply
Correct your spelling
are
arr
working in Correct your spelling
are
a
office, it is Change the article
an
must
, that you have to Have Correct article usage
a must
a
good knowledge Correct article usage
apply
about
your company. Change preposition
of
otherwise
, you can't communicate with your clients .
On the other hand
, nowadays subjects
like science
and technology
are the most important thing because today
world Change noun form
today's
based
on Add a missing verb
is based
the
Correct article usage
apply
technology
, we
cannot do anything without technical knowledge. Correct word choice
and we
Furthermore
it does not matter Add a comma
,Furthermore
that
which field are you workingCorrect word choice
apply
, always
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in, always
technology
interact
with it.
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interacts
For instance
, bakers have to learn about Add an article
the oven
oven
, Fix the agreement mistake
ovens
taxi
drivers how to learn about sharing Correct word choice
and taxi
location
and proceed Fix the agreement mistake
locations
payment
via apps. Change preposition
with payment
thus
, science
and technology
are mixed with everything around us so we cannot ignore it
.
Correct pronoun usage
them
Finally
, in my opinion
I believe there are more Add a comma
,opinion
subjects
, that very
important than Add a missing verb
are very
history
, like science
and technology
.
In conclusion, some people believe, it is better to learn history
because it is really important for future aspects, while others believe that other subjects
are important because today
world Change noun form
today's
surrounded
by them.Add a missing verb
is surrounded
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