some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world, subject like science and technology are more important than History.

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should study
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like
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and
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while others believe that
history
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can be the most valuable subject in school
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I believe
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like signs that
technology
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can be the most important
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than others. On the one hand,
history
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can be one of the most important
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in school. because we can't proceed
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without knowing
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the past
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of our country or world.
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law system is established based on
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past experiences. government or any other organizations cannot proceed
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works
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without knowing about countries past situation.
however
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it is really important to know every
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about our country ,
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you have to
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face so many problems
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when you are doing something official. when you
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working in
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office, it is
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, that you have to Have
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good knowledge
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your company.
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, nowadays
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like
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and
technology
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are the most important thing because
today
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world
based
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on
the
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technology
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,
we
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cannot do anything without technical knowledge.
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it does not matter
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which field are you working
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technology
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interact
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with it.
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, bakers have to learn about
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the oven
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oven
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ovens
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,
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and taxi
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drivers how to learn about sharing
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and proceed
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via apps.
thus
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,
science
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and
technology
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are mixed with everything around us so we cannot ignore
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them
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.
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, in my
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I believe there are more
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, that
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are very
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important than
history
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, like
science
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and
technology
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. In conclusion, some people believe, it is better to learn
history
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because it is really important for future aspects, while others believe that other
subjects
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are important because
today
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world
surrounded
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by them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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