some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world, subject like science and technology are more important than History.

Nowadays, people believe that
student
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should study
subjects
like
science
and
technology
, while others believe that
history
can be the most valuable subject in school. In my opinion, I believe
subjects
like
science
and
technology
can be the most important
subjects
than others. On the one hand,
history
can be one of the most important
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in school. because we can't proceed
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without knowing
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the past
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of our country or world.
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, our
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law system is established based on
the
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past experiences. government or any other organizations cannot proceed
their
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works
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without knowing about countries past situation.
however
it is really important to know every
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about our country ,
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you have to
to
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face so many problems
,
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when you are doing something official. when you
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arr
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working in
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office, it is
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, that you have to Have
a
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good knowledge
about
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your company.
otherwise
, you can't communicate with your clients .
On the other hand
, nowadays
subjects
like
science
and
technology
are the most important thing because
today
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world
based
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on
the
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technology
,
we
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and we
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cannot do anything without technical knowledge.
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it does not matter
that
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which field are you working
, always
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technology
interact
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with it.
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, bakers have to learn about
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oven
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ovens
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,
taxi
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drivers how to learn about sharing
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and proceed
payment
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via apps.
thus
,
science
and
technology
are mixed with everything around us so we cannot ignore
it
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them
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.
Finally
, in my
opinion
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I believe there are more
subjects
, that
very
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important than
history
, like
science
and
technology
. In conclusion, some people believe, it is better to learn
history
because it is really important for future aspects, while others believe that other
subjects
are important because
today
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world
surrounded
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by them.
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  • retrospect
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  • reflect on
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  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
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  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
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