In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people go to universities to acquire
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and knowledge, hoping to eventually get a good placement. But not all
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, despite getting good grades, find themselves employed.
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and present my opinion on what can be done to reduce the rate of unemployment among
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. There are many factors that contribute to the unemployment of college and university pass-outs.
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one is the highly questionable traditional teaching practice in
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grad schools, which is not sufficient to land a job after a course is finished. They do not employ modern
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and
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techniques, which deter
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from a place in a reputable company.
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, the
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in Nepal are in search of people who can do research on hydropower feasibility but the most popular institution Pulchowk campus offers a degree in civil engineering based on theory only without any site-based practical or research facilities.
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, the
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cannot get a position in those
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. Another factor is the admission of too many students in one subject, resulting in more
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than needed for a country.
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government demands only about 150 civil engineers in a year but admits more than 2000
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their engineering colleges. Because of
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remain unemployed. In my opinion, to overcome
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study should be included in the syllabus that results in fulfilment of the demand of today's
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. For an instance, if the government includes a research-focused hydrological study in its course of civil engineering,
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will have
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to build water-related structures that will attract the owners of hydropower
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.
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results in more employment for highly qualified
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. In conclusion,
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of
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approach in the related subjects and higher admissions than required are the main factors that contribute to unemployment among the
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.
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can be solved if more field-related studies are covered in the respective courses.
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