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*Assignment* In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it? *Submission is latest 2pm tomorrow*

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It is true that in some nations, the rates of crimes are decreased but
people
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 feel less safe as compared to the past.
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 will discuss the main causes of crime-related fears including fake
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 on social
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 and increased speedy
traffic
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 on highways.
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 will
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 suggest solutions to these problems including monitoring social
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 channels and improving
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 of
roads
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 of all,
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 are watching fake
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 on social
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 as Facebook and Whatsapp.
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, they feel unsafe from fast
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 on highways. There are a lot of channels on social
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 that spread fake
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 on social
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such
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 as murders that
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 creates fear in the mind of
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.
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, a few days ago, some individuals spread
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news
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 about the bomb blast in Karachi but
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 fake
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. The main purpose of illegal
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 is to earn profits to attract
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people
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 attention.
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, the cause of
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's fear is the speedy
traffic
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 of cars, buses and vans. To explain it, according to research,
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loss
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 their life due to road accidents. It is
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 the main cause of public unsecured. Maintaining a good infrastructure of
roads
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 and monitoring social
media
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 channels are both critical to
reduce
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people
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's fears. To elaborate , good management of
roads
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traffic
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 plays a vital role to reduce
traffic
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 accidents.
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, China is one of the well-known management systems to control
traffic
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.
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,
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 country has a low rate of
traffic
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 accidents around 7%.
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, the government should pre-check social
media
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 posts and take action about
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 fake
news
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, the crime rates and
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people
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 fear about society will be reduced. In conclusion,
people
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 feel unsafe as compared to the past.
This
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essay
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 discussed how fears are often caused by fake
news
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 and fast-moving
traffic
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 on
roads
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.
This
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essay
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also
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 suggested that the solutions to these problems are twofold: to manage a better infrastructure of
roads
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 and monitor social
media
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 apps.

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