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Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families.Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative .Discuss the possible arguments on both sides and say which side you personally support.

Nowadays parents are more dedicated to their
children
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.It is believed by some that, the leisure
time
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 of youngsters should spend with their family members while others think that it is an unnecessary task to stay behind
children
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 in free
time
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.
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 essay will discuss why
children
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 should spend their
time
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 with the family and why not. On
one
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 hand,Kids love to dedicate a long period of
time
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 to their elders.
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 is because
one
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's familiar sorrow find
is
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the place where his joy and sorrows filled up .young people experience that spending
time
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 with their family
build
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 them a happy life and a
success
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successful
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 man for
the
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society as well.
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,Indeed if a
child
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 is more attached to the family he tends to be
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one
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 with a good upbringing.
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 may be the reason for them to build up a nice bond with their family for their whole life.
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, few people think that frequently sharing
time
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 with kids makes them vulnerable and violent.In contemporary society,most mothers are not frequently engaged with their
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child
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children
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 because they believe that could be a reason for a
child
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 to become a damaged human being.
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,the grandparent of each and every family pamper their
grandchildrenchildren
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grandchildren children
,which is a reason why a
child
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's parents ought to believe too much affection could create negativity in their young ones.
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,
this
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 kind of family behaviour might drive the kids away from the togetherness of family and towards the negativity of society. To conclude, having more free
time
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 with young people will aid them with a successful life and be
a better men
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a better man
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one
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 day,though too much pampering of
children
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 might drive them towards violent and vulnerable behaviour.
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,in my opinion, I believe that youngsters deserve more love and affection even
though
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whether
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 they are free or not.

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