Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

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preferences of adults in the education
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according to their sex in 2009, while the pie diagram compares their age categories. Overall, it is clear from the pie chart that the majority of
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because they are aged 40 or over.
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visitors prevails over the male one. By far the most popular
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visitors prefers painting. Astonishingly, Sculpture has the lowest number of pupils, only about 15. The lowest percentage of
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visitors is built of people between 40 and 49.
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