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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

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 preferences of adults in the education
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 according to their sex in 2009, while the pie diagram compares their age categories. Overall, it is clear from the pie chart that the majority of
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 participants belong to old people
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 because they are aged 40 or over.
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 visitors prevails over the male one. By far the most popular
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 among women is a language
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, which has 40 female participants.
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, the multitude of male
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 visitors prefers painting. Astonishingly, Sculpture has the lowest number of pupils, only about 15. The lowest percentage of
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 participants are under 20 years old, as
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 value makes only 5%, while to the biggest age segment belong 42% of people and all of them are aged 50 or over. The
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 visitors is built of people between 40 and 49.
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, the man and women in age 20-29 and 30-39 amount to 11% and 16% correspondingly.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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