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Every year several languages die out. Some think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#year #languages #think #life #world
Language
 and culture have gone along together in a long history of
human
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. Unfortunately, many
languages
 disappear from the world every year. Some
people
 believe that
this
 is not significant, but I would argue that the loss of
languages
 is a regrettable phenomenon. it would be regretful [?] . There are more than 7,000
languages
 around the world including dialects. Each
language
 is related to
a
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local culture, as known as culture shapes the
language
,
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 and vice versa. The advantage is the diversity of
literatures
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literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
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.
Moreover
, when
people
 speak different
languages
, they have different unique abilities. Some
languages
 apply
the
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gender to every noun.
For example
, the sun and the moon are given a grammatical
have
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the
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gender in Spanish and French, but they have different genders in each of these
languages
 are swapped sex in the countries ].
Therefore
,
people
 might describe the sun as beautiful in
one
 country, and as strong in another. feel strong for the sun in a country, as feel beautiful in another country.
On the other hand
, some
languages
 especially
in
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 islands do not have a
countinghave
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counting have
mounting have
 counting system, so the
people
 who
useusing
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use using
 these
languages
 cannot identify the exact numbers. They can categorise only
one
, two, some, and many.
Besides
,
mathematicsmathematic
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mathematics mathematic
 and algebra cannot be used in these
languages
this
language
; fortunately, mathematics and algebra
they
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are not important in their lives
life
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. Nowadays, the governments in many countries encourage their societies society to learn learning
the
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popular
languages
, as
the
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second
language
. They added to their
the
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curriculums subjects
such
 as English and Mandarin. Life is more complicated when every human has to learn more than
one
language
 at the same time. In conclusion, each
language
 has
its
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 own
unique
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uniqueness
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and
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beauty
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, and it has transferred passed from
one
 generation to the
next
 / or to the other others
;.
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Therefore
,
pProtecting
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protecting
languages
is
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 preferable.
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