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Providing a national system in a country where the unemployed receive a regular payment only encourages people not to seek work and puts an unreasonable strain on a country's financial resources. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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The table provided compares how much proportion of seven different purposes spent by mobile phone users in three
years
 2006, 2008, and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that all people used mobile phones for calling in the
years
 shown.
Moreover
, there is no information on the searching and recording purpose during 2006. In terms of the purposes of mobile phone owners, in 2006, skipping the purposes of searching and recording, the percentage of making calls reached the highest point with 100% of people using mobile phones.
In contrast
, entertaining activities
such
 as playing games and music are the least
this
 year, with 17% for games and 12% for music.
Furthermore
, over 2008, while the figure for calling kept stable, recording videos is the least popular purpose of users. In terms of the
years
, the proportion of people spending on phones for calling fluctuated slightly between 100% and 99% in three
years
,
likewise
 the proportion of playing music when there was not much volatile during three
years
. There was a significant increase in playing games from 17% to 42% between 2006 and 2008.
Additionally
, 2010 witnessed a dramatic growth in searching and recording (32% and 25% respectively).
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