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The provided diagram demonstrates in what way
bricks
 are produced for the building industry. Overall, a glance at the linear process reveals that it consists of four main stages,
such
 as initial digging of clay, transforming into
bricks
, storage under various temperatures for a time and the final packaging with the delivery. The
first
 step involves the mining of clay by a special digger machine.
Then
, it is transported to the roller, previously, passed through the metal grid to make clay smaller. Before converting into
bricks
 by two divergent approaches, the sand and water were added. The future
bricks
 are sliced by a wire cutter or they will become
bricks
 by using the mould.
Subsequently
, the wet
bricks
 are situated in the drying oven to evaporate water for a range of 24 to 48 hours. After that, they proceed to the two kilns at different temperatures. They have temperatures from 200 to 980 and from 870 to 1300 degrees Celsius respectively. In the
next
 stage,
bricks
 are stored in the cooling chamber for the range of 48 to 72 hours. The final two steps involve packaging and delivering to a consumer.
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