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the proportion of different types of vehicle using a major road bridge in the UK

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The pie graphs illustrate the percentage of various kinds of
cars
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 which have used the major road
bridge
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 in the UK in 1965, 1985, and 2005. In the following paragraphs, the fluctuations in using diverse
vehicles
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 will be discussed in detail. It is evidently observed that the proportion of private
cars
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 has significantly increased in these three years.
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, private
cars
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 were approximately half of the
vehicles
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 using the
bridge
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 in 1965,
then
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, it grew to 55% in 1985, and
finally
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, surged to three quarters in 2005. A similar trend occurs for recreational
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 as motor homes,
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 it is a slight increase, i.e., it started from 4% in 1965 and increased to 9% in 2005.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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 trend is the other way around regarding public transport
vehicles
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.
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, their use of the major road
bridge
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 decreased from 29% in 1965 to 14% in 1985 and 5% in 2005.
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, lorries and other commercial
vehicles
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 used the
bridge
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 more in 1985 (20%) than in 1965 (1985);
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, a sharp decrease can be observed in 2005 (9%). Taking everything into consideration, one can conclude that the private
cars
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' use of a major road
bridge
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 in the UK has growingly increased in comparison to other types of
vehicles
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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