The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate
the
information about how the surroundings of a city hospital were upgraded and ways to enter in Correct article usage
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two
different years: 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, between 2007 and 2010 it is clear that
the hospital and Ring Road
stayed the same, while
the roads were upgraded significantly with some additions such
as,
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two
roundabouts, a bus
station, and a separate public car park.
Looking at the 2007 map in detail, the access to the hospital is bordered by Ring Road
which connects Hospital Road
to the south which
leads to City Correct pronoun usage
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Road
Furthermore
, there were six bus
stops along Hospital Road
; three on each side of the lane. Additionally
, there is a large parking space for both staff and the public to the south of the hospital and to the east of Hospital Road
.
In the 2010 map, upgrades can be seen in several locations. First of all, a new parking lot was added to the east of the Ring Road
for public use only which we gain new access to the hospital. Meanwhile, the old car park which was used for both public
and staff is now reserved only for the hospital staff. Correct article usage
the public
Secondly
, two
new roundabouts were added; one at the junction between hospital
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the hospital
road
and city road
and the other at the junction between Ring Road
and Hospital Road
. Lastly
, all the bus
stops which were present in 2007 were removed. Instead
in 2010, a new bus
station was erected on the west side of Hospital Road
giving access via the two
roundabouts mentioned above.Submitted by n.gawkseng on
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