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Task 1 academic Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given line graphs depict
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the proportion of
households
 owning electrical
utility
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utilities
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 and
also
 the number of
hours
 spent on
household
 chores per week from the year 1920 to 2019. Overall, the percentage of possessing all three assets in a
household
 had increased while the
hours
 spent on working daily work at home decreased gradually. As the graphs present, in the early years of 1920, 30
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 and 40
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 of
households
 had vacuum cleaners and washing machines respectively whereas none of the
households
 had refrigerators. But in 1940, there was a considerable upsurge in usage of refrigerators by about 48% of
households
 from zero. In fact, from 1940, it has overtaken the other two appliances and later in 2019, it was found to be one of the most procured appliances in a
household
 and every
household
 (100%) owned. On contrary,
although
 the washing machine was the most common appliance to be found in
households
 compared to vacuum cleaners and refrigerators, the proportion of purchasing it oscillated in later years.
However
, going by the duration spent on daily activities in the home, the
household
 has spent less by years and it reduced from 50
hours
 to 10
hours
 between 1920 to 2019. There was a noticeably declined in
hours
 working on
household
 chores until 1960 and from there it was observed a moderately dive to 10
hours
 in 2019.
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