Many countries today are expecting high level of migration from rural area to cities what are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

Nowadays, everyone
want
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to
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in the urban
area
due to
the
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some
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basic
facility
in many nations.
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First
of
all
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cause is that who lives in villages , those
are not get
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basic
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the basic
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facility
, which
essaly
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essay
easily
gets in the city ,
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, In many rural
area
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, education is not too good as a compare with
urban
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area
,
as a
result
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they migrate due to the compulsion.
Moreover
, families have to shift
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side ,
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, Most
of
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companies
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the companies
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starts
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their business in
city
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the city
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area
,
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they do not want it but they have no other option.
Furthermore
, Here are some solutions for the above problems
so
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firstly
, the government must develop
the
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basic
facility
in
rural
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a rural
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area
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such
as hospital , school and
another
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other facilities
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facility
,
as a
result
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due to
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it , decreases the number of people , who have become victims of migration.
Secondly
, companies should take advantage of villages because they get their
row
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raw
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materials
in
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at
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a low price from there ,
as a
result
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they earn more bucks than from the city. In conclusion, the law must work on it and
established
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some new bent , which
help
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to
decreases
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the causes for it and
also
companies would think about it due to the
profite
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profit
profile
profits
.
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