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Some people think that universities should provide graduate with the knowledge and the skills needed in the workplace. Other think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What is your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Nowadays, more people are struggling to retain their jobs cause of their academics and job
skills
. In
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 will explain how academics and
skills
 are important to continue in
job
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the job
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. In some universities,
skills
 or internships are in their circular.
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this
way
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 students will
enriched
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education
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 and will learn communication
skills
. After graduation joined in
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work, they will get problems
in
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 communication and
manage
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 tasks. Possible
to
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distractions easily.
On the other hand
, everything is taught by universities pupils will be
dependents
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, they can't mould by
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them selves
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. As they have to show their own interest to get talent. By their
interest
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 they can learn in online classes which are easily available
in
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 Youtube channels.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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