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Some people think history is a very important subject while others think history is not so important,and subjects like math and science are more important.

People have different views about whether
history
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essential
essetial
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essential
 for a student's future. I believe that learning
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 is vital for a kid. The main reason that people in
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 of
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 may not as important as other lessons is that
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 has no direct and tangible benefit to daily lives and work.
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 like math,
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and science
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 provide more job opportunities,
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and career
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 progression, and
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 can improve students' quality of life. But
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history-learning
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 is all about memorising something that
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 in the past. Getting a high score in
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 lesson brings nothing. Those facts have convinced people pupils should not waste their precious time
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studying
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, I firmly believe
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 not the whole picture. Knowing the past event has
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 advantages.
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, the past is like a mirror to us, learning
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 and mistakes can prevent us from making the same mistakes.
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, the education system aims to enhance students' overall qualities,
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 as being tough and persistent. Those characters, can not be learned from math,
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 but from some superhero stories
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that happen
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 in the past. For
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, Sudongpo,a famous poet in the song dynasty of China, had three massive
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, but he was still
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passionate
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, stop learning past records,
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 means that we are forgetting our past, the
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 generation will fail to appreciate heritages or traditional cultures which are a valuable asset in our culture, abandoning them will simply be a pity. In conclusion, despite that
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practical
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 as other subjects,
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it still plays a crucial part
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