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The length of working week does not reflect mordern lifestyle needs. It should be substantially reduced to give people more leisure time and time with their families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The employees are under
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huge stress due to long working
hours
 and cannot create a balance between their personal and professional
life
.
Therefore
, it is always suggested that
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 of work should be reduced. I
am completely agree
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 with
this
 statement and will highlight my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the reduction in working
hours
 can bring substantial changes in the
life
 of
working
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 community.
Firstly
, the employees will be released from the pressure of sitting in an office for
longer
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hours
 and they can become more productive than before.In
this
 way, they will finish their tasks happily and timely.
Secondly
, the majority of
people
 nowadays are suffering from depression and anxiety due to
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 social interactions and the reduced
timings
 at
workplace
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 will give them a chance to interact with friends and family members.
Also
, they can devote some time
on
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 health and
lesiure
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leisure
 activities which will bring positivity
in
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 their
life
.
Furthermore
, many
people
 are witnessing distances in their personal relationships as they cannot spend
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quality time with their children and spouse.
Hence
, the
cut off
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 in working
hours
 can mitigate the differences between their relationships and they can maintain a
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work-life
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work
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work-life
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life
 balance.
In addition
 to
this
, many skilled
people
 are quitting their jobs due to pressure of job
timings
 and migrating to other countries which
offers
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 flexibility in
timings
 and
hence
, a country can face
huge
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 crisis due to lack of skilled
people
. In conclusion, the
timings
 of work must be reduced to give employees
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 freedom to live their
life
 happily and
this
 will not only improve their productivity at
workplace
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 as well as bring serenity and happiness
in
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 their
life
.
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