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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Customs
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 and
traditions
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 are very sacred things
of
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 a
country
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.
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, when
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to live in a
country
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,
people
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 should follow those
customs
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 and
traditions
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 . I totally agree with
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 view. There are two main problems if the
customs
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traditions
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 are not followed.
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First
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issue is that
people
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 in that
country
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are not follow
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 their
customs
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 and
traditions
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 and they will run into
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difficulties when bringing goodwill to
people
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 around them
; and
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 they
unwelcome
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 in a
country
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, it would be very hard to adjust to
new
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a new
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 environment when you don’t learn and follow the
customs
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, especially in doing business.
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 to the
disavantages
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disadvantages
 expressed above, I still believe that following the
customs
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 will help you get undeniable benefits. The
first
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 is
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 the most important that
people
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 can avoid doing impolite behaviours or unsatisfied everyone .
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, you would be had
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fondness for everybody.
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, when you get used to the
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, you would not only have
opportunity
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 to learn and experience many new cultures
,
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 but
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 develop your vision and knowledge by interacting with new
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. In conclusion, I always believe that following the
customs
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traditions
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 is one of the most necessary things to help improve own business, relationships and more experienced in the life when
people
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 move to a new
country
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