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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Customs
 and
traditions
 are very sacred things
of
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 a
country
.
Therefore
, when
start
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to live in a
country
,
people
 should follow those
customs
 and
traditions
 . I totally agree with
this
 view. There are two main problems if the
customs
 and
traditions
 are not followed.
First
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issue is that
people
 in that
country
are not follow
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are not following
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 their
customs
 and
traditions
 and they will run into
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difficulties when bringing goodwill to
people
 around them
; and
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 they
unwelcome
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 in a
country
.
Moreover
, it would be very hard to adjust to
new
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 environment when you don’t learn and follow the
customs
 and
traditions
 in a
country
, especially in doing business.
In addition
 to the
disavantages
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disadvantages
 expressed above, I still believe that following the
customs
 and
traditions
 will help you get undeniable benefits. The
first
 is
also
 the most important that
people
 can avoid doing impolite behaviours or unsatisfied everyone .
Thus
, you would be had
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fondness for everybody.
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second
, when you get used to the
customs
 and
traditions
, you would not only have
opportunity
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 to learn and experience many new cultures
,
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 but
also
 develop your vision and knowledge by interacting with new
people
. In conclusion, I always believe that following the
customs
 and
traditions
 is one of the most necessary things to help improve own business, relationships and more experienced in the life when
people
 move to a new
country
.
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