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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been observed that the situation of
women
 has
been
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improved since 1970.
However
, some people argue that these changes are not sufficient for them to be deemed equal
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men
. As I will explain below, I believe that we should continue our efforts to contribute to more equality, in order to reach it.
First
 of all, according to several statistics,
women
 are paid less than
men
 for the same job and
qualification
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.
This
 inequality is
therefore
 unjustified. In order to unbalance the situation, some governments have recently introduced quotas within the administration or national companies.
The compliance
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 with
such
 rules may,
however
, lead to positive discrimination by recruiting unqualified
women
, and
finally
 results in more inequality.
Furthermore
, the lack of equality is emphasized by the very low number of
women
 as chairman or
member
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members
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 of the board of directors of listed companies. Indeed, in many developed
countries
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 it has been proven that it is more difficult for
women
, with the same qualification as
men
, to find a job with high responsibilities, which can have a negative impact on their salary as explained above. The reason is that due to the risk of pregnancy, employers usually prefer to enrol a man rather than a woman for
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high level
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job
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. In order to reduce
this
 inequality, we shall introduce, or at least extend
,
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father’s
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 parental leave. In conclusion, due to the fact that
men
 receive higher wages and have more
chance
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 to achieve a better career, I strongly argue that our societies have not yet reached sex equality.
Nevertheless
, we should stress
on
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the improvement
on
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the
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women
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 condition over the
last
 decades, which shall continue.
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