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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience You should write at least 254 words.

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It is critical to have a combination of
skills
 in the newly recruited workforce. Many companies observe that their new employees are poor in fundamental interpersonal
skills
.
This
 essay will discuss two main causes of lacking
this
 skill and suggest solutions. A main interpersonal skill includes verbal and written
communication
skills
. The primary causes of lacking interpersonal
skills
 are the traditional
education
 system and personal
attitude
. During academic years, the main focus is provided on mathematics, science and arts considering these subjects as career-building pathways. A person does not give importance to
communication
skills
 due to his/her negative
attitude
 towards supporting
skills
.
Recent
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A recent
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 survey shows,
,
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engineers
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that engineers
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 lack key soft
skills
,
for instance
, business writing, speaking and listening,
although
 they studied in premium universities around the world.
Communication
 subjects during academic
education
 may play a huge role to improve written and verbal
communication
skills
, and
hence
, these subjects are to be introduced. The
skills
 which are critical for future work should teach from
young
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a young
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 age so the required level of expertise can be achieved at the end of
education
.
Moreover
, personality and
attitude
 development lessons are to be taught at a younger age so that a humble and honest generation can be developed.
Further
 to
this
, all corporate companies shall provide training to newly recruited staff for the development of soft
skills
. In conclusion,
interpersonal
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the interpersonal
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skills
 of
workforce
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the workforce
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 are quite important for a successful business.
This
 essay discussed
main
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the main
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 causes of the ordinary syllabus in
education
 and personal
attitude
 for lacking
of
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these
skills
.
Furthermore
,
this
 essay discussed two main solutions
as
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the addition of a new subject in academic study and the proper training of new employees.
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