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The question... Nowadays many people change jobs quite regularly rather than working in one company for their entire careers. 1. Why do you think this is happening ? 2. How can companies keep their workers?

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In recent times, it is observed that people are changing employment rather frequently
instead
 of remaining the employee of an organisation for the rest of their professional life.
This
 could be because of poor staff welfare and for
business
 establishments to retain their employees, modalities should be in place to take care of
workers
 and their families. Several
business
 establishments today are profit-oriented, only paying their employees meagre salaries. Because of
this
,
workers
' welfare is usually seen as secondary, with the gains they would make being primary. Many
workers
 pass through a lot of stress and pains, not only to reach remote workplaces but
also
 need to persevere under poor working conditions and since these situations do not often improve in numerous circumstances, they have to leave
such
 jobs and seek solace elsewhere. A good illustration is Lagos State, Nigeria, where
companies
 are sited on the Island while
workers
 have to endure the hustle and bustle of Lagos life to overcome the hectic transportation network and expensive transport fares in the State to get to work. Unfortunately,
companies
 do not make provisions for these in
workers
' pay
such
 that many go home with mere stipends and have to quit their jobs eventually. Turning to steps that can help
business
 corporations retain their
workers
, putting in place incentives outside the regular earnings of
workers
 would be effective.
This
 could involve incorporating some allowances for housing, feeding, transportation, and accommodation into
workers
' wages
such
 that, those receiving monthly wages, would have a sizeable amount to take home eventually to cater for their families.
This
 scheme is presently in vogue in many major cities across Nigeria and has been proven effective for
companies
 to keep their
workers
 under contract. To conclude, people are moving from one job to another due to substandard
workers
' welfare packages by many
companies
.
Business
 firms can retain their
workers
 by improving their general working conditions both in the short and long term.
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