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Some people are born to be leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #leaders #leadership #learnt
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Nowadays, It is undeniable that
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role
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 of
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leader
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 in our self is very crucial to enhancing human
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. The notion concerning
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better
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skills
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, triggers a considerable debate, as regards, Put forward by the cluster of like-minded
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 who believes that some individuals have a natural talent of a
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 since birth, Others
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do not follow suit and feel that better
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 can be acquired by learning.
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 believe that good leaders are born genetically.
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 can be a bane and the particular reason for
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 circumstance is not a developed mind.
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, newborn children are very fresh-minded and they try to copy their parents, and some house members are involved in political parties by which they learn
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 to become
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 by which they make efforts but they are not able to achieve their levels because they do not have enough knowledge about decisions which they are making,
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 a survey has been conducted by researchers, resulting that small children are not as good leaders as compared to mature once. Despite the above arguments I side with those who support that knowledge is required to be a good
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. The predominant reason is that
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 is the most hand opportunity because most
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the
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people
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 have to follow decisions made by them. ,
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However
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a
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proper experience and knowledge
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 required to make a decision to overcome any problem. ,
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 it would not be out of place to mention that Nowadays, many illegal activities are happening due to bribes and
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 dishonesty and these the sign of bad
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skills
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. Individuals must be mentally prepared and well educated by
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they can acquire the seat of a
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. To epitome, Modi was elected by
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 who once
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 tea on a stall and he took bad decisions which
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 not beneficial to
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. In conclusion, there are convincing points on both. side but
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 side with those who are in favour that good
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 should no learned
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