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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #research #organizations
Some argue that fundamental
research
 should be funded from public budgets and controlled by the state, whereas other people are proponents of handing
this
 responsibility over to businesses. I strongly agree with the traditional approach of
the
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governmental control over developments in science. Only governments are by nature interested in financially covering the whole range of existing scientific topics, due to some of these topics not being of any interest to businesses. Even if a
research
 sphere does not have substantial potential to generate profits or economic growth, it is still important that scientists get appropriately compensated and provided with
tools
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 and technologies that they need.
For instance
, despite novel results in archaeology being unlikely to generate any return on investment, it is still an important area to fund. Financing by the government
also
 implies full control over other aspects of the lifecycle of scientific
research
. The most important is to make sure that the leadership at universities, institutes and academies only use
results
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 of
researches
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 for
public
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 good, as opposed to for aiding big businesses. If the government is not in control, there is a possibility that international companies misuse these results, generating profits for themselves and harming
the
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humanity in general. Recently, during the global pandemic, a few big pharma companies failed to provide access to their developments globally.
This
 resulted in many extra thousands of deaths, but at the same
time
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 it
also
 made their bosses rich. In conclusion, only funding and management by governments can make scientific
research
 prosper and bring the best to
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society.
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