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in some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. does renting a housr have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house?

#countries #people #rent #house #housr
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It has been argued by some, that renting a
property
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 is much better than buying
one
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, while
the
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others claim that having your own
house
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 is much better than renting. Personally, I find myself inclined to advocate the
second
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 opinion, which is to buy a
property
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, for a plethora of reasons.
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However
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 the up
comming
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coming
 paragraphs will list the
demirets
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demerits
 of renting a
property
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 with apt reasons. The
first
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 reason to consider renting a
house
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 as an incorrect decision to take
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 is the possibility of being asked to move at any time.
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 that, the money paid every month could be made as a
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mortgage
mortage
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mortgage
 monthly payments to own your own
house
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,
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, you could invest your money to end up
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being a landlord rather than being a
tennant
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tenant
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. Another important reason to highlight
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 is that people, who rent
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accommodation to live in, are unable to renovate or decorate as they desire, Actually, they sign
on
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contracts
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wich
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 force them by law to maintain the rented
house
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 as it is.
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, a good example to illustrate
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 point, is that many studies have shown that the majority of
tennants
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tenants
expresse
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expressed
express
 that they do not feel they are settled or comfortable in a rented place
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 because it is owned by another
one
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, some of them expressed that by seeing it is not our home. To conclude, the aforementioned points clearly
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illustrates
illustartes
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illustrate
 the reasons behind my support to buy a
property
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 rather than renting
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.
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, renting a
house
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 has a lot of pros,
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 as the ability to relocate easily, or to downsize in case of lack of money,
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, the advantages, which have been mentioned above, are eclipsed by the
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disadvantages
disadvantges
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disadvantages
.
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, I prefer to buy a
property
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 rather than
renting
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one
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.
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