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there is a heated debate about
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implementation
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implemention
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implementation
of
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death
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system
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, which offers various
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over whether it would decrease the rate of crime, or not. I think that the
resistration
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registration
of capital legislation has both merits and demerits. but in my opinion, I agree that the law is established as I think it would result in
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decreasingly
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percentage of terrible vice.
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with, the
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opponents
used to insist that
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of
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system
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would result in the abuse of
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person's
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rights.
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of all,
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system
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would make a wistful
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who is not
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pull
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to
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.
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means that
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mournful
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and kind
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would be sacrificed without any regard.
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, the sorrowful
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who was
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but wanted to become
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could lose the chance that they can live kindly and be the power to improve social development.
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, even if they
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committed
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committed
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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, they
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should
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should
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society and family. nobody
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about
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whether they could be
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essential part of society. In
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respect, they
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, I think we
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completely
compeletly
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have to bring in
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death
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system
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.
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and foremost, most
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criminal
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criminals
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would feel the
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to abide by the law
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the capital scheme. To be specific, they would feel terrified when they commit severe vice.
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, common people's
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about the importance of complying
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law would be enhanced.
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, the social environment would be peaceful and precluded without severe issues. In conclusion,
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there are demerits that
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death
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the death
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system
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introduce
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introduces
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in countries, I opine that the implementation of
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system
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would affect the decreased rate of crime.
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