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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
Embraced by many people as limiting
subjects
,
such
 as science and technology in university are believed to promise
students
 a brighter future to have stable jobs. While others assume that they have every right to choose their favourite majors.
This
 article will look into both statements and personal ideas. Definitely, restricting university
students
 to learn certain
subjects
 is an easy argument to make. These departments are chosen to contribute visibly to society.
For example
, improvement in medicine or surgery technic
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 on medical advances or engineering with numerous assistances from technology and science. Having graduated from those majors, the
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 are easy to find a job
opportunity
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.
However
, only allowing
students
 to persuade these departments can lead to an overcrowded
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 the labour force in the near future.
Therefore
, learning their favourite
subjects
 is still prefered by the majority of
students
.
For instance
, if there was a brand new industry, which need solid writing skills or artistic creativity and
students
 are typically trained to be an engineer or a doctor, how could they do that? But whether it is the case or not, the avenue of getting a job in favourite degrees is much harder than in former majors. So it depends on their decisions. Overall, while is reasonable to force learn
subjects
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useful, I believe that they should be encouraged to learn whatever they want so that they can help better prepare for whatever changes the future will bring.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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